Considering that I am not a technologically intelligent human being, nor am I in the position to suggest any types of revision to a video done by a professor of multimodal composition, I am only attempting to offer how I would revise the video we were told to watch.
First of all, I reviewed the original piece.
I found the long bits of information to be very intimidating. It is a personal pet peeve when texts are presented as big chunks of words and sentences. Though only a few sentences can still look like a lot to read. I feel like this information could be presented in a more encouraging way, that is, it could be less intimidating if it were split or even put into some kind of mini categories further.
I also did not pay much attention to the options at the bottom of the screen. Whether or not this was due to personal preference, I’m not sure at this point. I believe that the audience should be encouraged to follow these links, this could be done by mentioning what is under these links within the main text, or even labeling with topics rather than numbers.
I wish there had been some kind of youtube link for the video because I was not able to view the wmv format.
I really enjoyed the option of “or.” I think that is something that needs to be repeated.
